I've done far worse than kill you. I've hurt you. And I wish to go on hurting you. I shall leave you as you left me. As you left her. Marooned for all eternity in the center of a dead planet. Buried alive. Buried alive
Very pretty. Just a couple of nits to pick. No damage on the Photon Torpedo deck. (At this point the port side torpedo bay was destroyed by phaser fire.) And ya got the warp engines glowing. Otherwise this is a magnificant piece with great angles on both ships, a fantastic recreation of the Mutara Nebula and a very vivid star backdrop!
Kirk: ... OK... let's recap; all this static discharging gas is clouding our tactical display, our visual does not function, our shields are useless... those sporadic energy readings we detected port side aft could have been an impulse turn, we don't know for sure... and yet we've just detected the Genesis wave on a build up to detonation... how does that... never mind.
Not really. The explanation I just provided works just fine. The Genesis Device would very probably put off very intense energy readings, given what it does. Not to mention the USS Enterprise had closed in very tight with the USS Reliant with the intent of boarding and retaking her from Khan and Co, meaning whatever distortions were going on, were at their minimum. (IE: Less distance between the two ships)
It was a joke. You know... funny ha-ha, set phasers on pun? Lots of my favorite movies have plot holes. It doesn't make them any less enjoyable.
But if you want to get technical...
We know that from other ST series (ST TNG; Dophan) that Federation ships cannot produce a terrawatt source. For the Genesis device to work, it would greatly exceed those energy requirements - but that point aside, it would be too much energy to read at that close range. The power needed to create 2 grams of matter (one penny) is a billion billion watts, (1 with 18 zeros behind it) roughly 100,000 times more power being generated earth-wide today. But we're not talking pennies, we're talking planets, so those numbers are already too low. But based on these numbers, the circuitry housed within the Enterprise would normally not be channeling that much energy feedback. The sensor array would be so bombarded by the waves that it would overload the system and fry it. The science station would suffer a complete system failure. Spock would be looking at a blank screen, while wondering to himself: "Is this the proper time for a colorful metaphor?"
We're forgetting one thing. The Genesis device was "on a build up to detonation." Therefore, it wouldn't have been generating it's maximum energy when it was first detected, just enough to BE detected. Upon "critical mass" (detonation) I would entirely agree with that premise.
Taking a closer look at that plasma trail, I think it would have worked better if you lessened the effect the further it got from the Reliant. And if the end is the start of it all with the nacelle being blown away, a small cloud from said explosion would have been a good touch to add.